Wow. Very, very cool. I love the rhyming. (I can never get mine to rhyme well.) Thanks for your review--the story continues...

That was a whole lot of rhyming. I thought that flowed really well, I like repetition that isn't really repetition. If that makes any sense.Thanks for reviewing my story by the way!And I broke your code on you profile, I sat in front of the computer for hours agonizing over it. Okay, I guess I'm not that big a loser and it only took me a second. I'm rambling, but hey what else is new?

i really like the rhyming within each line

I loved it. Keep up the good work.

I completely agree with the message you are trying to get across to people through this poem. I love how it's written and it is DEFINITELY going in my favorites :)