Good job on this!

lets overlook the permiscuous technical errors in this poem and look deeper into its true essence...each leaf of each tree, experiencing tiny deaths individually and as a whole, yet beautifully...this can be paralleled to our souls...experiencing tiny deaths both individually and as a whole, yet grotesquely...sometimes death bares a softer face...excellent work!...cyanide

Great peom, but the rythym would be better if you moved certain words from their positions at the end of one line to the beginning of the next. Try moving the last word of the third line, first stanza, the third line second stanza, the firt and third lines on the third stanza, the third line fifth stanza, and the third line sixth stanza. Other than that slight rythym thing, it was really great I was entranced by it.

Beautiful stanzas. I think that if death is this colorful then I shall not quite dread its coming. Great piece though. It was lovely and though angsty...it had a brightness to it. Amazing.

wow...this flowed greatlythis is possibly your best work yet.great job, Hip! -ADD

Wow. I never really thought of fall like that...It's an interesting perspective on things that you managed to pull off nicely. Good job. :)