 Citharia 2005-03-19 . chapter 1That was a beautiful piece of writing.
I love the first two lines, the effect of the repetition of words (fevered and fevered, comfort and comforted) is pretty effective)
Like the rhyming, and the flow seems to go pretty well. Lots of emotion and sincerity ejected. Sweet but sad.
Well done! I love it, thanks for sharing ^^ |