Great job, I love the imagery and the title. It has a bitter tone to it, and its about love, and those too elements in a poem seem to be becoming rather popular these days, but this one stands out. I like!

This is very cool. I love how it all flows into one. Great job!

you're right - THIS IS GOOD. it reminds me a lot of something that conor oberst would write, and as i think he's a genius - definitely take that as a compliment! this poem has such a bittersweet air to it, which makes it 'exciting' to read - i also like how you use absolutely no punctuation so i can read the poem like one huge run-on sentence which adds an air of mystery which is positively refreshing. frankly, i'm adding this piece to my favourites. GOOD JOB!