Cheshire smile.

I love the movement and the passion in this. It's damn hard to write a really good piece about a dance... to capture the feelings and the rhythms... but I do believe you've done it.

Bodies rolling together, that's so cool. Awesome image. I like the capitilazion of the pronouns, too, and how at first it's just She and Her, and then it's We, Us. I also really like "that dead stare"... because you mean it in the deepest, best way possible.

Teny technical error: in "Slow motion-reality is taking it's toll" the "it's" shouldn't have an apostrophe.

I love the ending, because it starts it all over again.

That was hot! Very well written too babe.

Wow.

Just wow.

Beautiful and mysterious. Perfectly lovely and infectious as well. Mood was well brought and enough passion to leave me wanting more.

Keep writing stuff so damn well, and I'm going to have to stalk you.

-Ashish

I like this so much. You did a wonderful job on this. Keep up the good work.