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| James Daly 2006-03-09 ch 1, | abuseDamn. All I can say is this is pretty powerful stuff. A good message about race in this story so far. And the cruel things that the people do to this handsome young man just because he's diffrent is beyond...degrateing. I can't explain. But none the less, good work. I shall read another chapter tommorrow, and yet another review will be written. Kudos! Cheers,James Daly |
| Witchmaster 2006-01-21 ch 15, | abuseYay for Ash! Radell is a good person, much better than Gharan (whom I really don't like). Favorite line in this chapter: "“How would you like to be a squire, lad?” said Radell with a wink. “Simple answer.” He chuckled." Ash seems very young for a fifteen-year-old sometimes. I don't know why, but he just seems naïve sometimes. Happy Writing! ~~ WM |
| Celeste Se'oir 2006-01-20 ch 15, | abuseYay! That was awesome, I knew you'd weasel in some way for him to become a squire or something of the sorts, but that was a great way of doing it! Alai better be thankful to him. Keep it up!! Later,~Ffuffy~ |
| JBQ 2006-01-20 ch 15, anon. | abuseFinally, something good happened to Ashtaway. I was begining to think you were just gonna keep him miserable. Please update again soon! |
| Throggeh 2006-01-20 ch 15, anon. | abuseYAHO! -glomphs San- He. I had to reread half of it because I couldn't remember what had happened, it had been so long. -prods- Now, another chappur about San-kun. ^w^ Or I'll send Kiela to eat you. |
| M.U.O. 2006-01-20 ch 15, anon. | abuseYou really love angst, don't you. I still hate the characters, but it's well written. |
| Bookworm12-8-90 2006-01-20 ch 15, | abuseYay! Ashie's a squire! But for how long...? |
| Daaaaaaaammmmnnnn!! 2005-11-20 ch 14, anon. | abuseHuh. That pretty much sums it up. There is no other way to say it: this story is downright orgious. My only critique: it is not on sale in a store so that people could BUY IT and give you money. I wish I had a tatoo of a plastic surgeon performing surgery on a beaver. (write this down, I think it could be a book I guess.) Peace kellie. PEACE IS WHAT THE WORLD NEEDS BESIDES ROAST BEEF. |
| candycane-collage 2005-10-08 ch 14, | abuseAH! Late review! I'm SO sorry. I just haven't been on this site like al summer. School's kept me qite busy as well. Well, anyways, what an awesome chapter. I love Sanaer's tattoo. It's fancy sounding. This chapter rocks! wh00p! wh00p! UPDATE SOON! |
| Arrow's Flight 2005-10-05 ch 14, | abuseAhh. . . the plot thickens . . . I like the tie in with the tattoo. I want a tatoo like that! (at least one that would wash off. . . My parents would kill me.) Anyway. . . Ash ROX! Keep Writing! -Arrow's Flight- Oh my Gosh! I updated Avalon Tre! *freaks out and faints* |
| Throgmorten 2005-09-26 ch 14, | abuseHi San! ^^ -pokes- Ha. Torturing with suprise is fun. Go read the new chapters of HT, by the way. Or Rölin will keel you. Not that she wouldn't be assaulted by a mass of guilt and nausea afterwards...XD |
| Violet 2005-09-22 ch 14, anon. | abuseYay! The first review in about a year (or several months-I have difficulty counting...thinkgs...yeah...).Even though you have told me of this chapter several *cough*hundred*cough* times, it's still really good! It was a surprise that was a birthmark-ish thing. Trele was teh funny. *goes off to review other stories* |
| Shigure-ami 2005-09-17 ch 14, | abuseAYAME! YOU'RE BACK! I WANT TO SEE YOUR NEW HOUSE! anyways, i have missed you very much, how is cfa? and i like the new chapters in ws quite a lot. Althought ur gonna start making people mad if you don't EVER let ashy stop screaming in agony... i LOVE the tatoo idea. i would get a tatoo, probaby on my thigh, but it would hurt and then my parents would murder me and it would still be there when i was 85 and ew. Who is trele based off? anyone? just curious... and is the adam thing over yet? Govs is sweet- get somebody to invite you to homecoming so you can see everybody- Shigure |
| Celeste Se'oir 2005-09-16 ch 14, | abusecoolie. I like the choice of design for the tatoo. Poor kid can't seem to catch much of a brake huh? Though I'm starting to see where the too stories might come together now. Sque! I can't wait. Later,~Ffuffy~ |
| Witchmaster 2005-09-13 ch 14, | abusePoor Sanaer, he has no idea why this is happening to him. And a lot seems to happen to him. For the record: a.) cool design, very cool, and b.) I want his hair to be black again!! But maybe that's just me. Overall, I think the chapter moved a little too fast; one minute he's talking to Tréle, the next he's talking to the cosmetic surgeon. There was nothing in between. It was good chapter, but fast. Favorite line: “'C’mon, snowball. Dormitory inspection’s this morning, and there’s a sock on the floor.'” Rude as it was, it was also incredibly amusing. Not to mention random. Happy Writing! ~~WM |