|Reviews for Aelyn's story|
| iuhcidieh 2/19/12 . chapter 10
D'awwwh. I'm still siting here trying to figure out who the left handed legend is. At first, I thought is was her, but no. She is left hands though. I think.
| iuhcidieh 2/19/12 . chapter 6
I'm loving this.
| waitingForRand 12/1/11 . chapter 26
| The Weatherwitch 11/16/11 . chapter 26
just reread this,
as you do,
because it is awesome xD
| Boredom Inspired 11/4/11 . chapter 12
| YourCritic 8/28/11 . chapter 27
OhmyGASP. Loved this story so much!
You write really well, I love the way you've mixed speech and description, I honestly could have been reading a published book. Well, almost.
Aelyn is an awesome character, loved her very muchly! I really liked her emotional transitions during this story, quite nicely done. However, I DO think it was a bit much to have her be a military commander and then also love dresses and finery...one or the other, or she becomes a bit Mary-Sue-esque. Juuust something to think on, in case you ever look at this again and think - 'hey, I could rephrase that'. :)
Also, there are a couple of times when your timing gets messed up. At one point you say that the 'woman who fights with her left hand' disappeared 'two years ago', but really she'd only been gone for a few months. And I think you could have stressed the hand she was using to fight with a bit more when they first practise with staves. Oh and her injured hand seemed to get forgotten pretty quickly - an arrow through the palm would take MONTHS to heal!
Now, Gareth. :) He's pretty cool, but a bit tooooo nice sometimes. I think that the Jamis situation could have been handled more like "jamis is actually a bastard son of my father, thinks he has a claim to the throne, he's been trying to start a civil war for ages, if it comes out that you killed him and I let you do so, one will definitely start" kind of thing (JUST an idea!) instead of what you have, which felt a tiny bit rushed to me.
Hmm, this looks like I'm really slating your story, which I'm not. You had me hooked from the get-go. I really like how you describe action, how you described your characters' physical appearances, and how you left some loose ends that were tragic, but realistic (Gareth's sister's unhappy marriage). Just add a little more court intrigue and voila! off to the publishers with you!
Sorry for a rambling review! :)
| kcmyers 8/27/11 . chapter 27
i loved your entire story! i can hardly wait to read Isheyln's story, but i stayed up reading this one until almost three in the morning, so i guess i'll have to wait. anyhow, love your story and writing style. i just absolutely love your story, and i'll no doubt be checking out your other stories soon :)
| je-kay24 7/17/11 . chapter 2
Aww, this was a really sad chapter I feel really bad for Aelyn.
| je-kay24 7/17/11 . chapter 1
Really good prologue leading into the story.
| je-kay24 7/4/11 . chapter 26
Great story, really loved it. The only thing I would change is to get Gareth more involved in the beginning of the story and to lessen the chemistry betwee Kristram. Otherwise lovely story.
| Binkybaby 6/26/11 . chapter 27
Will Ishelyn have a romance like this one? Find true love I mean?
Anyways.. I loved it! Totally!
I enjoyed this.
| C.Turtle 6/12/11 . chapter 26
I take it back, I take back all the times i gave a review to another saying how good and brilliant and speechless i was... I take it all back, cause this story, this story, beats it all, tops it all... Never have i fell in love with a story from fictionpress as i have with 'Aelyns Story'...
This should be on the markets selling...
Good Job, you've won another reader..
| non.graceful 6/6/11 . chapter 26
I admire your talent. Your first story and it was good- better even!
I can't give any criticism because I forgot most of it due to it being so good.
Congratulations on writing this :)
| Old Fragrance 6/4/11 . chapter 26
I liked it :)
Read it in one go
| Genato 3/13/11 . chapter 26
OH MY GAD. IT WAS BRILLIANT. :))
i liked everything except not knowing about what happened to the cousin... i expected something more epic on how aelyn will bring peace... more epilogue where they kiss and al and have children. :))