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| darkmistresslae 2005-06-12 ch 1,   | this was really nicely written. i like how it seems as though the speaker is trying to convince him/herself that he/she isn't anorexic. the ending is really good too. nice job |
| Adam Thomas 2005-05-06 ch 1, | Perhaps your not (assuming its you in the poem and not a created character, I create characters who epitimise emotions and problems), there are many eating disorders, and all are dangerous, but your right iv seen what anorexia does and this poem sums it up perfectly. I think your use of imagery in all your poems is very good, if not a little obvious, try experimenting with allegory. |
| dustytiger 2005-04-05 ch 1, | wow, great peice, have you ever read the beauty myth? this peice really makes me think of it, it scares me how many people i know who would totally relate to this piece, great work and thank you for the review |
| Clap Clap Raise Your Hands 2005-04-02 ch 1, | wow, this poem just really hits you, it's scary but nessesary i think to be made aware of this issue and i think this poem deals with it really well, i don't know what else to say really, except the last line hits me the most out of all of this and the repetition really helps to highlight this, brillian poem, just a sad sad topic x weasel within x |
| Sorrowful Dreams 2005-03-24 ch 1, | hm...a very unique and different poem. Haven't heard of something like this before but still very great job. |
| Second-Hand-Screamo 2005-03-23 ch 1, | There is beauty in the stick figureThe collarboneThe ribcageOthers don't seeThe wonder of a scarThe healing in a cutThe joy of spidery traces on skinAnorexicCutterSelf-inflicted, yet it's all based on someone elseSomething elseA mystery we don't want to solveA gallery of beauty and magic in what others call twistedOthers don't see Just a little poem for you, I came up w/ it when I saw this piece of yours. I can't post right now, so you get this one all to yourself.Great poem, by the way. Very personal and descrpitive. |
| Trajo 2005-03-23 ch 1, | wow. agian with the identifyingness. but yea. i dont know. i dont think looks matter, be happy the way you are. but i get alot of crap about looking anorexic (tho im not) and it gets annoying. and sometimes i think i lose it and i am. but im not. its just a constant battle of the mind. yet agian, i understand you and i wish you luck. :-D ~Trajo~ |
| Rosanna28 2005-03-23 ch 1, | This..is..SO..awesome! The way you used the line 'I'm not anorexic' over and over again really makes the poem if you ask me..And then the last 3 lines...Just simply amazing. Really my friend, I'm off to read more of your wonderful work!! ^_^ Much love, Rosanna. |