that was beautiful. it had a very deep sense of emotion that really came across softly. i absolutely loved it, and this is the first piece of yours that ive read. keep writing

marionette/lexa

The words flow on the tongue, over life and leaves and memories. nice job.

It's beautiful.

this is truly wonderful keith, you did your grandfather proud

o=h wow, this made me cry, amazingly written with so much emotion, i cant say any more than that really x weasel within x

That was absolutley beautiful and it had a lot of heart. Keep up the good work.

keith, I am incredibly jealous of your talent!! I haven't been online lately and I yes I regret it!! Look at what I've missed! Keep up the good work, as usual, beautiful poem :)

Oh my god...this poem is very moving. I can understand how you feel as well, it's got a deep meaning in this poem. Very nicely written, I like the small phrases you've put into the poem as well, it adds a nice effect to it.

[~Shadow of Silver~]

Hi been a loing itme nice job

so sad but spiritual. i like the words in the bracketts, flows smoothly with the poem. sorries for the loss, i hope everyones ok...*hugs everyone*

M... so passionate, so deep! Only you could write so!! Keep up the amazing work,

Love,

Anna

I will definitely remember you. ;) Gorgeous. Lovely. Excellent. *sighs* Wonderful line, "Raindrops fall from languorously cascading limbs"

i love this so much, especially the lines in brackets, there so beautiful and just amazingly well written...this is truly one of the best poems ever well done...and i know ur gran loves it and is very proud of you just like me...beautiful...i love you. lots of love ~AllyCred~

aww..beautiful again Keith. you really are a great writer. and since my brain wont cooperate thanks to your stories, im gonna have to stop.. anyways, great work. love Zai

Perfect. I'd hate to use that word so freely, but this is precisely that; perfect. I've been delving into the writen art of poetry more now, where the techiniques of metaphors and such seem to matter, and let me say, that this is a perfect example of what to do. The people who had critiqued my work would love this. I love it too. Beautifully described, and a wonderful tribute. Exceptionally done,-Rae