Really interesting how you brought it down to the mirror level...I would have thought "skin" would be the last level...but I like mirror a lot better. The idea of something hurting like brand new shoes is kinda cool actually...never woulda thought of it! :P

you call this a poem i call it fancy but you are a cupcake on the top of my grandpappys head which he will eat for dessert and you smell like sassafrass

I loved this... alot. i loved the rhyming and the repition. One thing, though, the last line and titile don't really fit the poem's feel, i don't know, maybe that's just me. well, anyways, good job.

i love this...ur such a better writer then me...its amazing how well you write and with so much eomtion i wish i could convey all that in my work...simply amazing...i love it. lots of love AllyCred

i love that ending

Wow...this is going on my favs. Sounds so much like me once upon a time. Brilliant. The rhyming works very well in this. _ _Hawke

Great idea, i love the gradual realisation that the person is yourself, great. What songs that? i must have heard it cos the idea sounds vaugely familiar.

awesome loved it