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| Islandbreeze 2005-08-23 ch 1,  | abuse"The darkness in the west sinks, as must be;Moon bids the waking earth her soft adieu." I loved those lines, and this again, like your other poems really captured, at least in my opinion what you wished to show-each word adds to the picture prefectly. |
| PAnZuRiEL 2005-07-02 ch 1, | abuseA complex and subtle piece. While it is beautifully structured and written, I do have a small complaint about this one, being that the end is so... not. I don't know if it was the language or the rhythm, but this one just doesn't seem finished to me and it would be great if you expanded on it a little. |
| Lady Laiered 2005-03-27 ch 1, anon. | abuseIf a picture can be worth a thousand words, than this poem is worth at least a hundred pictures. Somehow your words convey the colors and sensations better than many pictures I have seen of the same event. I thought dawn was a cliched and over-used poetry subject. Your poem is anything but cliched or boring, though future poems on this subject by others may now seem to having read this. |
| deli-lise 2005-03-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseinteresting. |