wow. this was very well written. what a beautiful poem. I like anything that has to do with hope etc so i was pretty into it from the start...but the descriptions in this were wonderful! Good job

~Mack

Wow. You're a really good poet, you know? In terms of poetic structure, the paired rhyming lines is perhaps the simplest construction, but you carry it off with real skill and delicacy. The language is beautiful, and the images clearly evoked. Definitely a work of art.

I thank you kindly for the reivew and your kind words, heres a few of my own. I loved the language, subtle and witting, great without over powering it. The whole thing is light with great imagry. I especially dig the last four lines. Great job. I enjoyed it.

great poem! great rhyme scheme and absolutely wonderful flow(althought there were 1 or 2 places that didn't so well) but it was a really good poem... good job