I liked the form of this, it seemed to really fit the poem if that makes any sense...and I loved the bit about the melodies being like vines. The last lines were so sad and really brought it all together. Great.

oh...that was so sad. So powerful but so sad...especially the last lines. And how true is this? very. I loved everything about this poem...im very sorry i cant give CC but as im sure i've mentioned, i dont know poetry very well...i just like to read it!

~Mack

You know what I wish?

Not that I could write poetry like you do (though I do wish that...)

I wish that I didn't know what the feeling you talk about in this - I wish I couldn't relate this much to it...wonderful, as is the rest of your work.

Nice, some free-form poetry. That's probably my favourite style, you can do so much more with free-form than with a strict, structured piece.

As usual, the poem is very well written, the language good and the topic was handled with insight and understanding. It's wonderful the way you can write with clarity and emotion that really puts the reader in perspective.

Awe, great ending. Great topic. Sort of simple and straightforward, but you got the point across and the emotion of unrequitted love was very strong. Lvoely job.

Oh, ouch. In... let's see.. 85 (83 not including the title) words you have managed to tell a complete though TRAGIC love story. As usual, vivid imagery, and a brevity that adds rather then detracting from the message. VERY well done.