I swear I reviewed this before. Regardless, I loved it. I know nothing about mangas but you remind me of some newfound Emily Dickinson.

"Let’s watch the rain play…"

*is instantly reminded of the rain song*

"Rain rain rain, we love rain, splash splash splash, fun fun fun, rain rain rain ... "

I like the structure of this poem and the concept is very... interesting. I am not sure I understand what you are getting at, but the rhythm and imagery was very nicely carried out. well done

Not bad. I like it, thought something in this line needs to be fixed "My job it simple" but other than that, I think you've done a nice job.