Good piece, but what made you feel like this? We all got our problems, but this is just... brutal.

This is wonderful. The short, choppy sentences cut through viciously like a stake through a heart.

Aw...-teardrop- So sad but well-written. I can't help but feel bad to poems like these...as beautiful as you wrote it, it's not so easy to say I was happy to read it -tear-. Keep on writing!

Sounds a bit unfinished but what you have done is very good. I like the way you get so much emotion into it. Well done!