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| DaBuffster 2005-05-09 ch 1,  | I love the idea of this, and I love the last verse. It's... you. It seems to be like... everything you tell yourself that verse. |
| Infinite Smiles 2005-04-26 ch 1,  | No more wearing thin! Ea, I tell you! Well, anyhow...loved the poem. I especially loved the lines that you mentioned that birth and death are both pulling at you. Pur-fect. Jessi |
| Eirien 2005-04-23 ch 1, | Great song, good imagery, and i love the hope it inspires, the rfusal to give up in spite of all adversities. I am worn thin at the moment, so there might even be hope for me ... *lol* |
| Visions of Harmony 2005-03-27 ch 1, | Oh, I'm glad to see you expressing yourself in poetry again, another very deep and meaningful piece from you, John. It's an amazing poem too, I found I almost wanted to sing it, so maybe it could be a song? You know, this sounds weird, me being a lot younger than you and all, but I'm really proud of you :) Huggles,Rozie x x x |
| Nikkoletta St'arah 2005-03-26 ch 1, | There was too much cliche and indescriptive content- the stanza that began with, "I am worn so thin that I am see-through" was very nice. |
| eden is burning 2005-03-26 ch 1, | A really true message well written. Congrats on a great job. |
| Josie 2005-03-26 ch 1, | Hey this is WAY KEWL MAN! lol... sorry. I really did like it! I like all your stuff and I always want to tell you that there's something special about the one I'm reviewing, but I don't because I find that each one of them is special and awesome and just... GREAT so yeah... It's really hard to review your stuff because I love all of it so much! lol... But it's nice to see a poem from you posted... and hopefully FicPress will let me post this because it has been a butt when I have tried before... I really enjoyed reading this and can't wait to see more! Josie@-8-- |
| LauraKM 2005-03-26 ch 1, | Really good, i love the analogy. The use of questions is really good. I like the idea of the elastic band, it would be nice if you expanded on that a little more. My favourite is the first stanza, the life and death thing. Really strong. |
| monkey 2005-03-26 ch 1, | Great poem. And yAy you finally got it uploaded. Even tho you couldn't get the formatting how you wanted. monkey |