Each line pulls you further in and makes you read the next one. Very good writing !

chilling...wow, , i wonder what inspired this?

loved the ending, it was superb, your are quite talented, keep writing :D

this is kewl! There is ALMOST a great flow! You start out with one, then loose it, then almost regain it only to loose it again. Thing is, this time I am not sure that is a bad thing, lollets see, interesting mystery!keep on writing!

Very well-written, with a nice tone of dark desperation. Nice work.

Another great poem! You really rock! The last line is kind of ... chilling. I don't know how else to describe it.

Well done!

Ooh I like this, it's kind of dark but playful all at the same time. I really love the images you use and the lastline! Keep writing!