I just dont get it but its wonderfully written. Ill give you that of corse.

dont get the ending tho. but thas ok. i like it. cool story. keep writing

Brillant. I am slightly confused on the ending but it makes me want t learn more, to read what happens next. - Lovely job, can't wait for the next chapter! Until then.

!* Noelle *!

This is a really good beginning. The opening paragraph is great and I'd like to see where you will go with this. The ending is slightly confusing but it leaves you waiting for the next part. I think it's definetly worth contunuing and I'd look forward to reading more or it. QueenVixta

great job on this. It's so good. Keep up the great work.