"and I cry in pain as you claim what isn't yours"

Its so fragile and delicately written, which wraps the darkness of the equally fragile character's heart (i make assumptions here) in a roll of sheer cloth hiding pain beneath silk, and I love it.

Your poems have so many meanings. I love it.

...Interesting. Short and simple. Leaves lots of room for imagination... And imagery.

Very smooth rhythm. Good job. )

damn, its so short but so so bloody powerful. I know just where you;re coming from, you put it well.

FUCK YOU YOU UGLY PIECE OF CUM!

YOU CAN SHOVE UP YOUR SAGGY HAIRY PUSSY WHERE YOU SHIT ASS WRITING BELONGS!

ROT IN HELL!

In so few words, you express brilliant emotion that encompasses the human boundaries. Brilliant, and beautiful. It has a morbid touch to it, yet it is brilliant in its telling, and in some strange way, the morbidness is quite fitting for you character _ I mean that in a good way _ Anyway, great work.

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It is what dreamers call reality and realists call delusion. An unbalanced equation where all definition fails.

Powerful, you express so much in these few lines, and placing the "yours" all alone in the last line stresses it even more, this is really well done.

FUCK YOU! UR A NASTY ASS SLUT UGLY FAT ASS HUMPBACKED WHORE I HOPE YOU GET FUCKED TO DEATH BY RABID ANIMALS! I HATE YOUR FILTHY PUSSYEATING CLIT! NASTY ASS UGL;Y FUCKED UP ASS WHORE! MAY JESUS FUCK YOUR PUSSY FOREVER!ASS

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FUCK YOU ROT IN HELL UGLY SLUT!

Hell, just thought I'd review back ma'am. This is really good! It's deep, it's angsty (I love angst) and overall very carefully written. On my poem obsession.

oh, no that's all right! Really? Yeah, I did use the "f" word a little too much, but sometimes if I go back and have to change the poem, I mess it up so bad that the original "magic" that was in it dies.

Well, thank you very much for the review, it didn't offend me at all, you were being very nice about it, thank you.

If there's anything at all I can do for you, or you have any questions regarding some of my poetry feel free to ask.

-EvanPark

This is quite deep. It is very good.

interesting...

simple, but very powerful (as for wolfy-chan, you wouldn't even know he got hurt by the way he's acting. he's the same ol' guy he always was). wouldn't say this is one of your bests, but hey, it's still a good poem. great job, keep writing! -

Sumi-chan; what you call love, I call pain

(PS out of random curiousity, do ya have a xanga?)

nice structure and it says so much, nice work!

This is great. Is this refering to rape? or something else? cuz it seems like it. you do OMG just .

Extremely raw touch to it. With no capitalization or punctuation it definately adds to the feel. Me likes.

Naomi