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| pinkeclipse 2008-05-31 ch 1,  | abuselove it please continue!! |
| pinkeclipse 2008-05-31 ch 2, | abusehe sounds hot! |
| pinkeclipse 2008-05-31 ch 3, | abusethanks for the chapter! |
| pinkeclipse 2008-05-31 ch 4, | abusewill he have competition which will make him realize his feelings? |
| JoBen 2008-05-30 ch 4, anon. | abusegreat story ... nice romance. too bad Bella is so insecure about her figure when obviously Graham likes it. I wonder what happened to her to make her think she was fat. |
| BeautifulSin 2005-12-12 ch 1, | abusethis is cool |
| Jackarooster88 2005-09-13 ch 3, | abuseI really like this story! I hope you update soon! |
| Kalanu Citlali 2005-07-02 ch 3, | abuseWoo hoo!! Great chapter! Even though I'm about a month late, I'm glad you updated! Keep up the good work, and feel free to call down the powers of your muse any time you like. :D |
| Shorty Baby 2005-06-07 ch 3, | abuseI love it! Great job! Hope to see more soon! |
| BellezAzul 2005-06-05 ch 3, | abuseAnother good chapter. Good job on the sexual tension :) Two thumbs up. Next chapter, do the accidental kissing thing! :-P Update soon babe! |
| MandyHubbard 2005-06-05 ch 3, | abusehey! just want to say this was a great chapter- you're getting really good at creating scenes that are character driven and not actiion driven. I enjoyed the interaction after the broken plate...and I'm dying for these two to get together! One thing to work on is your use of "ing" verbs...adding ING to the end of a verb weakens it. Stuff like "causing her to jump" would be better as "she jumped." Know what i mean? Its more concise and easier to picture. I like the complexity of her feelings about her weight- I think everyone can identify with it. It was also great the way you had him inadvertantly insult her- becuae all guys do that by accident!! us girls are too sensitive...so we can all identify with her feelings. Anyway, great chapter. :) |
| guardnerd 2005-05-25 ch 2, | abuseHey! Great story. I know exactly how she feels. When you described her it sounded like you were describing me. One thing, you tend to switch tenses throughout the entire story. One sentence is in the future and the next is in the past. You need to pick one and stick with it. I would recommend the past tense. Other than that I can't wait for more! |
| No-One's-Hero 2005-05-17 ch 2, | abuseGood beginning! I like the basis of the story, it'd be great to see them each interact with others, to show how different they each are when together (like how Graham always calms down around Annabella). Looking forward to reading more! |
| blazing gem 2005-04-12 ch 2, | abuseHey. Wow... Graham sounds like a hottie.. ^^ And he's finally noticing whats been in front of him all along.. Good job! I wanna see more interactions between the two next chapter. |
| Luv and Peace 2005-04-07 ch 2, | abuseHey, awesome details. This time, tenses didn't get switched and thats really good. So far the story is doing alot to generate reader's interest. Anyway, I should get back to chemistry (rolls eyes). Update soon! |