 jellybeanjohnny 2005-04-02 . chapter 1 are you gay? sorry this doesnt matter but from this poem and draem come true i thought you might be gay. cuz you said your a girl |
 Jack the Ripper 2005-04-02 . chapter 1Nicely done. Your last two lines were somewhat out of synch with the rest of the poem though, allowing the energy to slow to a trickle and end. By no means did that keep me from enojoying the work though. And one last thing: I just wanted to thank you publicly for your honesty in your reviews. Most reviewers will simply leave praise without pointing out the flaws in your work and areas that need improvement. So thank you. A lot. And one last thing; in "The suicides grave", I used an older term, in which a suicide was someone who commited suicide. I probably should've made that possessive, but just so it's out in the clear-Jack |
 hypocrite extrodinare 2005-04-02 . chapter 1god... this reminds me so much of me and this...um... person i liked... its a good poem... Im going to go cry over it and the person now... |
 Simply Stupid 2005-03-29 . chapter 1Typical male :-P this is a great poem, i really like it. It does sound a bit pathetic but i think that is how it's meant to, and that shows the hopelessness of ur situation. It's really good! Well done! |
 Ravager's Torn Wings 2005-03-28 . chapter 1Sweet and Sad. Keep up the wonderful work. |
 dragonsdream13 2005-03-28 . chapter 1very sad. hurt in relationships is one of the worst things in the world. keep writing, its good.-DragonsDream |
 Wistera 2005-03-28 . chapter 1 You haven't hurt me. I've hurt you. I'm hurting everyone. I'm sorry for it, too.
How did you rhyme that... I shall eternally wonder. |