This is VERY good.I like it a lot. ITs well written and I cant wait for the next chapter. keep it up!

if you dont finish this... i will... i will... i wil... i dont know... but ill do something

it is way to awsome to not finish, you should be very very very very very very proud( i know you are ne way):P keep it up

brocko

Awesome stuff there! I really can't wait to see how this story develops. Excellent start, keep it up!

AWESOME! simply awesome. at first i was getting a little bit lost, but it all came together. My only TINY little complaint is the tenses. I think you switched a couple of times. other than that, pretty good! now, if only you could write the actual STORY now, *sticks out tongue*

Peace and Chicken Grease

Wow, great beggining! Really interesting story so far. Your writing style is really groovy; i luv it! Wonder what happened to that Damien guy? Anyway, please continue!