Now this one I can comment on.

God I can only think about what this child(?) is suffering.

A neglecting mother (does she hit him/her too?)

You could only imagine how she is how you describe her. Such a small description but you can get so much from it.

"Cold eyes and a hard frown"

When I think of that I get my own mental image of her. It may not be what you had in mind but that is what vague descriptions are for.

So the reader gets an idea.

When I read that description I see: (I will describe at least two diffrent women. A poor one and a rich one)

*Brown hair (frizzy or primped)

*Cold Brown eyes

*Thin lips (made for making a tight frown)

*An alcoholic

*Bitter because either: her husband left, is cheating on her or is even a bum

*Thinks of her son as a mistake (his real father could even be the pool boy .)

*Acts diffrently when 'guest' are around and yea.

That's all I can get for right now.

oh I likey... please continuw :D

Very vividly expressed! I can see the images of this so clearly!

Really good. I didn't expect the ending. I guessed this poem would be about something else.