It may not be the best story I've ever read, but it has potential. I hope you continue it. Don't let the others put you down. Writing just takes time is all. It takes me around ten rewrites just to get a short story into something that I think is worth reading. So don't give up and I'll make sure to follow along for updates. Just thought I'd let you know.

As Shakespeare once said "Your play is quite possibly the worst piece of fiction I have ever laid eyes on." And I agree, a drab, ho-hum plot and a horribly clichéd ending equals a banal conception that should have been left in the murky depths of your My Documents folder. The swear words painted a beautiful yet representational portrait of real life and a random treehouse. I guess you were going for a similar style with the dialogue eh? Getting back to the random treehouse, I noticed that there wasn't much description of the setting. So I'll assume it's in a Disneyland bathroom.

Is there supposed to be a narrator? Or does he/she/it awkwardly transition into other characters? Or is this a new style of fiction that you created out of your own brillance?

Next, the analogies are, well, terrible. Here's a great example:

"...it was a good laugh. It was low and loud, like the sort of laugh comedians do when they’re talking about how great New York or San Francisco is."

You're shooting for a very select target audience with this analogy that completely misses its mark nonetheless. In fact, this analogy (along with your others) doesn't make any sense whatsoever. The only audience that would understand your analogies would be 50 year old drunks who buy Captain Underpants books.

In conclusion, I suggest dropping out of school and getting a job writing for Family Circus.

Thank you

Why in the world would anyone in their right mind want to build one? Every community with a sane amount of people would have one built. And one in a tree house? For the love of God stop trying to be a modern day Harry Potter.