Enjoyed it; there were a few minor things, but not enough to disrupt the flow of a wonderful poem. WRITE MORE!

Yay! You posted it! *is happy* You know how I feel about it - its cool beans, yah. ^_^

~ Teeg

"Song of the Burning Warriors"--you categorized it as a parody/drama, but I didn't really see anything humorous about it, so I'm wondering if perhaps you meant to put something else...or maybe I'm just missing something completely. It wouldn't surprise me. Anyway, I think the idea of the poem is really interesting and I really liked the imagery you used. It actually seems like it would be better as a short story so that you could expand more on some things; for example, why are the soldiers in the jungle (or wherever they are) in such extreme heat? And at the end, it would be cool if you had one of the men go insane, instead of just suggesting that it could happen.

Sorry, I know this hasn't been the best review, but perhaps you'll find it helpful. I really did enjoy your poem. Please write more soon.

cool. its kind of a horrible thought but interesting nonetheless. I saw nothing wrong with it so great job!-Dragonsdream

I like the poem lots. Here comes the constructive critisism:1. The poem had WAY too long phrases for it to be free verse. Free verse (in my opinion) should be flowing a bit more, and it seems like this poem should've been some kind of setting, I think it would've been better off as a regular rhyming poem.2. The beat of it was kinda hard, again, flowing.3. I like the main idea of the poem, and the title. The poem needs some tweeking. Nice, though...real nice.[~Shadow of Silver~]