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| Lowell Boston 2005-04-09 ch 1,   | Among angst poetry this is a well thought out idea. My only suggestion is to paint with your words as much as to describe your feelings. Use metaphors and similes. Perhaps. Like a pet,or the things you buyI fell so owned.Controlled.As free as a lambbefore the slaughter. Take the above only as a suggestion. Lowell |
| Rose Marie Wolf 2005-04-02 ch 1, | It's a part of growing up. Believe me, i know the feeling. Good job expressing your emotions though. Keep up the good work. |