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| Saerie 2006-06-28 ch 1,  | abuseLike the soft jazz music - going slowly, without any rush. Nice style you have - you don't run don't try to speed up action. Like it very much. |
| Aslan Israel 2005-04-28 ch 1, | abuseInsanely wonderful. I wonder what on earth inspired this? anyway, another brilliant one. |
| C.J. Mahan 2005-03-31 ch 1, | abuseto answer: there are some questions in life that are better left un answered. |
| Loucien 2005-03-31 ch 1, | abuseI liked the style this was written in. Overall I thought it was good, but I was unclear on who the narrator was (why was their a man they where not aquanted with and why was the Jazz fan the "kindly gentleman"). But I looked at the other reviews and no-one else mentioned it so I may have missed something. |
| JenniRose 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abuseI liked how the pattern was repeated, more people kept coming onto the elevator and saying 'hello'. Maybe the kindly gentleman was some supernatural being that was watching over them. Anyway, pretty interesting. |
| celestial tears 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abuseInterestsing and strange like something from a Stephen King's novel. Good job, I liked the language u used and the mystery of it. |
| EnterWonderland 2005-03-29 ch 1, | abuseYou have a very interesting style to your writing in this story. I was immensly amused by the continued pattern of repeating the pattern of names and places. It gave the story a very intriguing beat, and kept it very humorous-- it was very easy t see that the 'kindly old gentleman' had something that was a bit amiss with him. I'd say for a short story, you did excellently. Good job! |