well...your anger seems useful here...still, i don't think it would be good for me to face it =P

besides before than fist bleeding is more interesting destroying the mind of the one who dared get angry onebut that might be way too cruel to some ppl right?

this reminds me strongly of my own experiences. kudos for a powerful and excellently written piece. the message ((which i can relate to)) was conveyed very well, and made the poem even more gripping. beautiful work, please keep writing.

I feel the anger in this piece. Muaha, great job on this, Sumi-chan. Your talent is always amazing, and your poetry has always been a delight to read for me. You always have these effective techniques throughout the piece, especially repetition, which I believe is a hard technique to acquire, and the last lines at the end gave me chills (the good kind) ^_^ Wonderful, wonderful job.

chibichocobo

i like it.. very nice

when people can't control their tempers it ** me off alot, but I don't blame you... Not even the smartest person in the world can do so. I don't know what to say here, in terms of structure here it's OK-ish, but for some reason it gets to repetitive and there's something missing in this poem. Keep working at this. -ADD

*is hit over the head with said hammer* O.o *eats hammer* Yum~! ^_^ I too have been feeling a bit angery, angsty as of late just after Easter...*sighs* I hope you feel better. ^^; *glomps* X]

!~ Noelle *~!

the italics seem to enhance your anger all the more.