(i like this) very nice poem, you use cool structure

This is great, as usual. I'm always expecting top-notch poetry from you from now on ^_^ The formatting is also a nice touch, and the parentheses are an effective technique for this kind of poem. I like it. I can tell that you're going to be a masterful poet when you grow up. ^_^ I see that you've improved even more, if that's even possible, and I will continue to remain a fangirl of your works.

chibichocobo

o... creepy

Love it Sumi-chan. Love it. *hugs* Great job as always and keep it up! *hugs* How is your friend? ^^; I know I've asked this alot as of late ut wasn't he hurt seriously. :( I'm so sorry, I know in your shoes I would have probable hunted down the assaulents and have hurt them ... painfully ... with sharp objects. *evil grin* x] MWUAHAHA~! XD

!~* Noelle *~!

o...i like fire, but every1 knows u shouldn't play with fire- i liked how u related it to greed & desire (temptation)

Gosh golly that is good!! i like the (words in parentesses) how they add just that subtle touch, and the metophores are excellent! keep it up man!

its good. keep it up.