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| DementedOracle 2005-04-04 ch 1,  | abuseThis was very well-written. It felt a bit angsty, but at the same time, triumphant, especially at the end. I think a lot of people who misdirect their anger should read this. This is one of those poems that I wish I couldn't relate to so much. One line confused me:"No like me retract"I couldn't really understand what you were saying. |
| Moon-Chaser 2005-04-03 ch 1, | abuseThat last line was very profound. This poem is like you are reading my mind, its so like what I feel, so like my situation. Thank you for sharing. Keep it up. |
| Arutha 2005-03-31 ch 1, | abuseThat last line was chilling, br. This one is awesome too! I feel this way pretty often, so I think I see where you're coming from. Some people just have some stupid complex where they have to find random targets for their anger, and I guess all you can do is be there for them and let them scream at you a bit, give 'em a hug, and walk away ;P I really love the sarcasm in this poem; when I try sarcasm it's usually too under-the-cuff and people don't get it, haha, but you've got the knack of it, for sure. You might re-read this one by the way, there's a couple of gramatical errors (ex. No like me retract < I have no clue what that means). Anyhow, awesome poem as usual; keep it up. |
| SagaciousPnay 2005-03-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseOh wow...such emotions. Excellent job! Keep on writing :) |
| Simply Stupid 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abuseProfound ending. Good poem. Shows unhappiness, sarcasm, and deep feelings. |
| Sorrowful Dreams 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abusevery deep and expressive. I can relate to this when I was younger.. But the flow and rhyming is really great. I enjoyed reading it. |