very cynical in my opinion, but that's not a bad thing, you do cynicism completely well. "Like a piece of water paper/sick and forlorn"- that was grand. cheers on another good piece.

oh, i really like this. The last two lines in particular are lovely. dark...nice and dark. The metaphors you've come up with are interesting and the poem flows nicely (unlike this review, lol). Basically, very nice, i like it a lot :D