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| Whispered Secrets 2005-06-22 ch 1,  | abuseLove it. I adore the fourth verse ("the world whirled while I dangled/strung erratically from its silver axis"). I love love love the idea of the glass cup bringing clarity to the world. Awesome job on this one- I totally love it. |
| FuzySliperz 2005-04-27 ch 1, | abusehey, it's lavina i got my FP! i still need 2 rite something 4 it which i started nd i need a better pro, which i shall get. i like this poem cuz of how u compared a waste paper basket, a garbage can to love. its a rele good metaphor, explained through your writing well. Also, i like the ending, but i'm not sure i understand the hyphens. |
| Caim 2005-04-22 ch 1, | abuseWow that was cool. I thought it was really interesting and unusual - like most of your stuff. You have the most unique phrases. Wow...I'm so honored that mine is the only story you really read. Thanks so much! Yeah...the bold will always be spoken by one character and that's Lafayette. He just doesn't speak out loud most of the time - since he's always in or on some weird object. Really! You would proof read for me and tell me where commas go and stuff like that! Col! I tend to use lots of...well non sentences. Like in chapter three there was this part that just said 'Sweat.' Please, don't mind those - I love those, you know to get the feeling out. But if you could proof read and put commas, fix run-ons and things like that. I'd be really happy! Thanks so so so so so much! I feel bad though...I mean...I don't want to take away time from you. |
| Soul of Night 2005-04-08 ch 1, | abuseI like it! I should read some more of your stuff, cus it seems really good. Keep it up. PS - Coupling is hilarious |
| CircusCandy 2005-03-31 ch 1, | abusethat's some deep, kickass discriptions |
| aBlOnDeRHermione 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abuseIt reminds me of Simon and Garfincal, with the Corn Flakes and paper cups heehee ^_^ FROG! |
| Cyssel 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abuseI actually liked this. The beginning captivated my attention greatly to start with, and so did the rest of the poem! wonderful poem |