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| DaDel Amor 2005-03-30 ch 1,  | abuseCute, Catchy and to the point. Mysterious, 'who is this girl?' 'Is she loney?' Very nice! |
| CyanideKiss 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abuseThis is almost cute, yet somewhat depressing. |
| Rebekah the Scribe 2005-03-30 ch 1, | abuseThis is really poignant...its so, what's the word I'm looking for? Beat-nik. I could hear, like...bongos in the background and stuff. Cool beans! I love these three lines: "Maybe the water contains your sorrow Of living every today and tomorrow Working with mops..." I mean, those lines are great! Good job! ~CR |