Ah ha. I only have one question. (This is the story you did for english, neh?) Did you keep the curse words in the story when you gave it to Mrs. Burlinglame?

Good and Dark, you do an excellant job of keeping up with the little details that make the story a believable and realistic read. It remind me of French Foreign Legion stories. I'd like to see you write some more in this universe - show some of the positive if it's there - Thanks for posting it.(Check out my ROE - Soldiers War for something similar, yet different.)

that was excellently written and well dictated. it had a very intriguing plot. i think you should lengthen this or build a story around it, because its a good idea, with the men and the kian rebels and everything you could make a really good story out of it. you should really consider continuing it because this was simply amazing. -DragonsDream