Not a bad story here, DW. Seems as if it could be an episode of "Dead Like Me"--curse Showtime for cancling it!--but not bad.

Seems as if it's the first part to a series, covering how the main character adapts to his new position--it would be interesting to find out how new he is to the whole other worldly thing.

Could use a few more commas here and there, but didn't notice any typos.

this is a good, realistic piece. i liked it but i have one comment to make. names like allen and milee are fine, but they don't really sound angelic, do they.