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Reviews For: Locked in Darkness

Litheral
2007-05-16
ch 1,
The poem has some good images, but it's very chopy. You seem to want to say something else in the middle but there is nothing written. Maybe a bit more in the poem.
Karma Chameleon
2005-04-05
ch 1,
Nice poem. Well, freaky actually, but yeah. "how sicking" does not make sense though, perhaps you meant "how sickening" instead? Anyway keep up the good work. ~Karma Chameleon
Honey Nut Loop and m-j
2005-03-31
ch 1,
hi i've had friends who've had depression and one who was close to suicide. thank you for sharing this poem.mj
Faithless Juliet
2005-03-31
ch 1,
dark, but well-detailed. I love the use of metaphores to strengthen the piece. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.
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