The poem has some good images, but it's very chopy. You seem to want to say something else in the middle but there is nothing written. Maybe a bit more in the poem.

Nice poem. Well, freaky actually, but yeah. "how sicking" does not make sense though, perhaps you meant "how sickening" instead? Anyway keep up the good work. ~Karma Chameleon

hi i've had friends who've had depression and one who was close to suicide. thank you for sharing this poem.mj

dark, but well-detailed. I love the use of metaphores to strengthen the piece. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.