Interesting. Some minor punctuation errors- I think 'God' has a capital 'G'- but overal very nice. ) Good job.

Aww! Oh gosh I feel the tears commin on now! This was soo soo soo soo sad! I hate when people die (well who doesn't except for murderers). But I like to take consolation that they are in a better place with Jesus. So really we should be envious of them. You did an excellent job of writing this. It almost had me crying. God bless and keep you!

Oh, nice poem :) I liked it, it was very well written.

*Toni*