Whoa, man. That was deep. Really got me thinking.

This is an excellent poem with a few rough points. The idea of the poem is superb. You might try breaking the first 7-8 stanzas into one poem and the rest as another poem with a similar stanza pattern to the first. Then meld them together into a series

wow. i know i like your poetry already. don't stop writing!

*sigh*...I wish I had your vocabulary and talent for word choice. not bad, so much movement in it. It keeps my bloodp umping.

Good concept, but the rhyme scheme was off in the beginning. At the end, it got better tremendously. All in all, I'd say pretty good. :D

Oh whoa! This is a really, really good poem. I like it a lot, and it is so true, too. It is very nicely written. You have the heart of a true poet.

Cassandra

I think this is a beautifully written poem, with incredible figurative language. You make a very good point that people should question their beliefs-I for one am constantly questioning mine-but since you seem to so adamantly believe that the world is black and white, I'm curious-have you ever questioned your own perception of reality (not saying it's right or wrong, I'm just wondering)?

I see your point, but for some their values are irrepressable. Kind of like the law, stable but never stands still. Great work.

Wow great poem! I love oall the metaphors and use of imagery. Keep it up!

i love the last stanza the most

Hmm... not my favorite of yours. While poetically it is very well-written, it lacks the emotional punch that you usually deliver. Some of the images were wonderful (the coral snake, and the cup of grief bit as well) but I think you could do a lot more with this.

Yep, I'm back again. _

This one is beautiful, as with all of your poetry. It just seems to have poured right out of your heart and that's something that I truly respect. The last stanza brings the poem to a very nice well-rounded end. I am jelous...very jelous... *sobs*

But again, amazing work.

Nuff Love, Matteo

Beautiful darling. YOu never cease to impress. Liebchen Rose

Very nicely done, as usual! I liked the last three lines the best actually, although the entire idea of this poem is great all together. On a well-rounded critical note, *takes on a professor's tone* a few lines here and there seemed a little too forcefully rhymed in my opinion. (It is too easy to be the right path / So with my words I shall cut a swath [...] But not if you fear shattering what you believe / Never unless you break your mirrored sieve) I dunno, I'm just not a very rhyming person (if that makes sense) so sometimes rhymes tend to take away from the poem to me. *shrugs* That was a minor 'fault' in my mind though. You continue to amaze me with your words in each new poem you post - something I find wonderful and awful at the same time. Wonderful because they're always so perfect and great to read and awful because it wasn't me who wrote them! lol (yep, the green monster of jealousy lives on!) Excellent work though, MJC. Keep 'em coming!