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| Holyoly 2007-02-08 ch 1,  | OMG that was deep, I really liked it. |
| Mechanical Dolls 2005-11-16 ch 1,  | This is a really great play. It's just... wow. I'm feeling very unintelligent at the moment, so I'm just going to settle with this. ~MD |
| Zio 2005-04-10 ch 1, | Hello! Wow, what emotion. That was really good. Heh, another case of father-beat-son. I kinda guessed that he was beat-up by his father/parental figure before he revealed it because I did that some what with Gregory in my story minus the suicide part. I think Todd got over the fact that he was talking to the principal a little too quickly, but this is meant to be a 10 minute play so I guess that is okay. Anyways, this is a good 10 minute play, and I wish the best of luck to you in the contest. Zio |
| C 2005-04-09 ch 1, | That was great! Todd's speech was amusing and realistic. The principal's part was less fun to read- towards the end he started sounding a bit corny (though I guess it's understandable, after all Todd IS twelve)- but still very believable. The bathroom setting really is clever. So are little details like the toothbrush instead of a knife, the end where Todd flushes the toilet. I can't believe you're only sixteen!! *insanely jealous here* I'M sixteen... |
| the.pink.life 2005-04-01 ch 1, | Wow, I hope you win. I thought this was really really good. I mean, it was so REAL. The language and interactions were perfect, and having it be in a bathroom and with just two characters was brilliant. I think I knew it was the principal all along, or someone along those lines, but I also watch a lot of crime shows and have a tendency to figure those things out. LOL. I really liked this. Great job. |