Wow...this is hauntingly beautiful. For me, every line has a meaning. It's really not 'awfully terrible' - I love it! My only *constructive cricism* is that I think this would do really well as a poem, but then the structure is really good as it is now...anyway, well done! This is great! ^^ PS. Thanks for reviewing my song! PSS. I love the little verse at the end of your profile - did you write it? Just wondering

Wow great poem. Its very orignal. I'm actually speechless. Though I can say that I'm the same way. Keep it up!

i love the concept, its very creative. are you going to turn it into a full lenght story, or keep it as such? im very interested to see what you do with this, its to good an idea to waste