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| Gottschling 2007-04-17 ch 1,  | abuseLUV IT...it totally sums up what a heathly life is i luv it ... its so true ... "don't dwell on the grief" and its perfect b/c it keeps u wondering with the perfect imagery i luv how u started staring at the sky and ended with it so it made it seem like thoughts PERFECT! KT |
| darkmiko 2005-08-30 ch 1, | abusethat was awsome! keep up the good work |
| Slowly Sinking 2005-06-15 ch 1, | abuseIt's good to read some happy stuff... Great work, keep writing! |
| Thyrt 2005-04-24 ch 1, | abuseah! that was so good! :D |
| eviljackinthebox 2005-04-06 ch 1, | abuseWow, your message is pretty strong in this one... but your rhyming is kinda typical. You know what I mean? It's like... you're using the first rhyme that pops into your head. Try a rhyming dictionary and find some unusual unique words to add depth to your poetry. Just a suggestion. But like I've said before, you're still an amazing poet. Keep writing, and try writing from your heart about a topic no one else writes about. Think about it. Keep writing. |
| Princess-anna57 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abuseOh my gosh, this is so amazing! I absolutely love this poem! You are quite a good writer; keep it up! ~Anna~ |
| hypocrite extrodinare 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abusenicely done... I want to thank you for the reveiw! And your work is really good! |
| WarriorHeart 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abuseOkay, you asked for me to review and here I am ; ) I really liked the topic of this poem a lot. I have a lot of thoughts like that, but you expressed it perfectly. It also made me think of the book Brave New World... have you ever read it? Should check it out sometime. Also, many props for the rhyming, I am not one of those writers where it comes naturally so it always makes me appricate others who can, and you did a great job at it without detracting from the poem. Off to read some more, and review of course. |
| Clockwork Angel 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abuseI love the uplifting theme and the rhyme...it was just great, it's one of those rhyming poems that has such a smooth flow...keep writing ^_^ |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abuseVery expressive, and idealistic with sincerity. |
| Ethereal Kisses 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abuseI really love the message you give across in this poem especially the line "Take a risk – for life is brief" and I love the themes and ideas you bring up. Great work! ~ Ethereal Kisses ~ |
| Tom Madden 2005-04-03 ch 1, | abusenice work. i like the last three stanzas best |
| Crazy Biene 2005-04-03 ch 1, | abuseI can definetely relate to this!! |
| swift sky silver 2005-04-02 ch 1, | abuseah, what i would give for a moment of peace. i enjoyed reading this poem. it was great. keep it up =0) |
| shane 2005-04-02 ch 1, anon. | abusewShe ponders at night – how little we know, And why we humans have sunk so low. We believe we are smart; we have jobs and a car, But yet we fight ignorance that leads us afar. is so true |