CONFUSING, AMBIGUOUS, MYSTERIOUS and deep.
ive also noticed your fetish for narcissa, that is intriguing.

well done, melancholy feel of life - spititual.

heyy i know you wrote this like, two years ago but i just wanted to tell you that this piece is absolutely amazing, my favorite out of anything i've read on fictionpress. i printed it out and now i have it hanging on my wall. i absolutely love it.

I really like this. I like the whole "unreliable narrator" thing where you portray how she's treated while she acts like it's all normal and we are left to conclude for ourselves that it's almost abusive. It kind of makes us fall under the spell too, and be willing to take it if it meant we could be around Narcissa too.

that was INCREDIBLE. seriously. i'm a bit speechless right now... our writing is beautiful, how it picks a point and kind of dances around it. ::sighs:: simply gorgeous.

i thought it was good, i liked the way you didn't always state that they were drowning or that they were... yah. the way you wrote it was deep and yet it wasn't a medaphore(sp?), just ideas.Skwe! it was good!

Okay, well, first off I dislike first person stories, and I also dislike stories set in the present tense, because its too 'in your face' for me and such. The writing style and pacing was good... However, I found Narcissa to be way too 'out there' and difficult to conect with. In addition, her constant preachings about life were okay at first, be she goes WAY overboard and that makes her seem repeditive and shallow. She's still cool though. The main character, the 'I', was too wussy for my tastes, a complete pushover. So I have a hard time reading about something in the "I" tense with someone I can't relate to at all. The plot and femslash bits were very well done and expressive. Points for you. And I noted the influence from the borther bit from your manga. ^^

So, I'll be honest, I didn't like it, its not really my taste. But, its very well written and has a lot of heart behind it. I give it 10/10 for beauty and effort, but a 3/10 on my personal interest scale. Still, good job!

You're amazing, Treana. I can't believe it took me so long to start reading your fics again. Then again.. I've only read your Yuugi-ou fics, and I've lost my taste for Yuugi-ou. Thank you.

I LOVE this story! I can't believe only a few people reviewed! Your style of writing is so meaningful. You put little thoughts in there so perfectly. I love your one line sentences. They really pull the story together. Again, love it!

oh my. ((sob)) That was so deep and beautiful. gosh. That was. wow. That was. Amazing. That was. everything all at once. I loved it. wow. wow. I'm speechless. that was lovely. Oh wow.

((dashes off to read your other stories))

very sad, once i started reading it, i couldnt stop

Well, I'm happy to see you've added more. :) I absolutly love your writing, whether you proofread or not.I actually drew this little cartoon-thing of Narcissa, as she's become my favorite character. If I can get my hands on a scanner, I'll let you know, K?Hugs, and keep writing. Always.

on the contrary, it was an awesome beginning. tell me it wasn't a one shot.

Hey, I thought this was very good. Keep up the good work