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| Ajna 2005-12-02 ch 1,  | abuseBeautiful wording, I enjoyed reading this! It's quite ironic that such a wonderful poem came out of inspiration from writer's block. Huh, it's funny how life works. :) |
| Kat-Renee Kittel 2005-05-02 ch 1, | abuseWhat a vivid portrait of writer's block!! Do you know much computer science? I'm having a hard time picking out a favorit line - it's all good!! "weak and pallid light obstructed by eclipse" & "unsure hands reach for the tangible and grasp nothing" "pounding the head from inside out with echoes of a past reality" That's three!! Write On! ^..^ |
| Manuel Fajar 2005-04-20 ch 1, | abuseOf Xanadu all that I know is daily bliss, A sonnet playing lyrical to thrush's voice, Among the 14 to the 30th Mozart, Variations floating in ethered universe, Where stars once radiant collapse absorbing all, Our minds bloom through a thousand permutations strange, Until we come to release brought on by love's Faith, Without an opiate to guide us,—just our hearts. |
| Edraith 2005-04-18 ch 1, | abuseWonderful, your imagery is elaborate, complex and unique as usual, I'm impressed with the ideas you come up qith. I like the allusion to Coleridge ... ;-) |
| Arcane D. 2005-04-09 ch 1, | abusewow.I usually don't like long poems, but this is an exception. I love the metaphors you used in this one. -ADD |
| Luneko 2005-04-09 ch 1, | abuseCool poem! I love how it flows and tangles in my mind. (Of course, my mind is kinda weird.) I can see that the vocabulary would be rather high-level for some (especially considering the number of young people on the site), but I guess it's a choice between the perfect word and a simpler word that is less apt. Personally, I always prefer the perfect word. :D But isn't perfection what we all strive for? |
| Dying Without Gackt 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abuseThat was really good! It was really interesting thats for sure - I was very different. I really enjoyed it! |
| Xavier Everett 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abuseWow. And thought that I had a large vocabulary. This is a really cool poem, even if you do have to read it very carefully to understand it. Keep writing. Xavier Everett |
| simpleplan13 2005-04-03 ch 1, | abuseawesome poem... not diggin the title (i HATED that section in chem class).. still great poem & thanks for your review |
| youzi 2005-04-02 ch 1, | abuseCannot help but be amused that you wrote a poem inspired by writer's block..such an oxymoron! But this is a great piece...loved your complexity of expression even if i had to read through the lines thrice to get what you meant! Loved the line 'dendrites transmitting messages from the CPUto fingertips to graphite to paper'...could really see the neves and stuff in my mind's eye.Very ** and nothing like what i have imagined before. Keep writing =P |
| poetic abortion 2005-04-02 ch 1, | abuseThis is really cool, I love the fact it was inspired by writer's block. XD Great job, beatifully done and written well. ^^ !~* Noelle *~! |