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| Colastar 2005-05-23 ch 1, | You gave the message is very clear. My favourite line is "Each gold star, a man I slew". |
| Lakoria 2005-05-01 ch 1, | Good job! I like the words you choose. I also like how you should what some people find as victory and you show how foolish it can be. I will also state that I'm not anti-war, but I'm not really for it. I think the way Pres. Bush handled it was good, but that's my opinion. Great job and I hope to read more! God bless, Lakoria |
| maybe.i'm.dreaming 2005-04-08 ch 1, | I really like this poem. I think all the wars are just really stupid and in most cases very unnessary. Oh and my poem isn't really a song. But I don't know. Maybe if I wrote some music to it...anyways thanks for the review! ~Kristina |
| genre_disturbed 2005-04-03 ch 1, | u said "each gold star, I man I slew" it should be a man... |
| OnyxDawn 2005-04-03 ch 1, | Wow...I'm amazed. This is a unique poem. I've never seen anything like it. I like the stanza 'silent screams upon their lips/those eyes were wide with fear...' because it hasa good rhythm to it-as does the rest of the poem, but I think that one stanza sticks out a bit. -OnyxDawn |