hm, it is interesting...I love the imagery, and the way all of it is worded.but I'm not sure I got the same mesage that you sent.I dunno, I got something like the death of innocense, and how youth today is becoming materialistic and obsessed with how they look (blonde next week)and it was interesting how she matured in the last lines, going to straight hair and in a bun, and the sweaters... I'm not sure about the silver chain tho... it is an interesting piece.

hm... I like it. Some of the wording is awkward in places, (green in eyes, red in hair), never go fancy with your wording when plain wording will do. Anyway, this is good! Keep writin'!