Reviews for Va'ic Mixzu Sdza't

Reviews For: Va'ic Mixzu Sdza't

Triden 2005-08-24 ch 1,	dang it lina...you are such a good writer. review my story or else! Mwhaha. evil artemis smile you didn't fall for my attempt to get you to review my story with an open mind.YOU"RE SO MEAN! hrumph! psdo you know who I am yet? ;P
angelsstar 2005-04-10 ch 1,	hm. cool title(even though I don't understand it). I like ur bio a lot. Esp. the cool t-shirt sayings thingy. =) The first chapter is very vivid. There's mainly color description.
Ash Matthews 2005-04-10 ch 1,	Interesting... sadly I dont have time to read all of what is written, but even from reading one and a half chapters I'm fairly impressed. Of course there are one or two grammar and spelling errors (apologies, I'm a spelling/grammar Nazi) but on the whole I was delighted with the piece. Keep at it... [N.B. For a title, the one currently used seems perfect to me - it is in fact what drew me to read this piece in the first place...]
PyroHiroshi 2005-04-09 ch 5,	Hmm... it's getting good. :)
Mithril-Moony 2005-04-08 ch 1,	whoa. you actually wrote more than one or two chappies. that's a first. keep going lina! I wrote chapter two for my cucumber. read and review!
Richard Allen 2005-04-08 ch 5,	I like this chapter... I'm not into image heavy works, even though I know people are, and I like the normal things you use that provide hints... like the tape on the staff. You also provide a disruption and foreshadowing with "teacher never leave the classes," so the reader knows something is up, and has to keep going to find out what.
Richard Allen 2005-04-08 ch 4,	Keep writing. You're doing really well to create a sense of suspense... and your action is developing rather nicely. I dont' know who the character you just wrote about is, but you described him pretty well, the whole passage about fire and all, but make remember to make him more than just a sadistic creature who goes around setting things on fire. I'm sure you already knew, and it occurs to me that I should let you write and not tell you how... :D
PyroHiroshi 2005-04-07 ch 3,	Nicely done. :) and just to note... the freezing winter seems a little more cold after that... shiver
Richard Allen 2005-04-05 ch 2,	For a first attempt, this is pretty nice. Short chapters doesn't even have to be a problem, just write the amount you feel is right. Don't try to fill up pages with nothings, because it isn't good stuff. Stick to the meat of the story, and add fluff where it is needed. Now, as for the story, I like the idea of indentification, you can really make a theme out of being your own person, not just a name... just a thought. I also like the idea of "Seven Sacred." Leaves a sense of mystery... kinda of "What are these Seven Sacred spells?"Very nice. Be creative, this is fantasy. You can do anything you like with it.
PyroHiroshi 2005-04-05 ch 2,	It's not badly written or anything. It just doesn't appeal to me... I guess I grew outta the wizard school style writings... or I never really was a fan to start with. :p Otherwise, grammer and the overall putting together of the story is pretty good. :) Not bad for a first time fantasy. :)
One Who Knows the Truth 2005-04-04 ch 2,	It think as far as fantasy goes (and I'm certainly an avid fantasy reader) this is starting out really good. Try to write longer sentences. You also need to describe the campus and some more of the culture...
One Who Knows the Truth 2005-04-03 ch 1,	Great description! I don't know where you're going with this, but so far so good!

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