You know wat i love about your writing? Your ability to tell a good story and fitting the words in the perfect places. You have a talent sugar, never lose it!

The extremely powerful ending was amazing and finished the poem really well, like a real conclusion. Thje beginning started it out really good too.

very nice

*hugs* KYahh~!! I am in love with this peice Feral, once again I am amazed by your use of words and by your imagery. You bring out so many emotions it surprises me. ^-^ Beautiful poem, powerful and filled with emotion. Great job! Keep writing! XD

!~* Noelle *~!

very interesting concept and opinion. i think there was a slight speliing mistake

Except a whisper ones quiet now hoarse

im pretty sure that was supposed to be once, if its correct then i apologize.keep up the good work