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| incandescent.smiles 2005-05-27 ch 1,  | abuseMy bob, that's beautiful! It's a great metaphor, and you managed to write it out lovely (whereas I probably would have butchered it :P). terrific job! again it would go on my faves but... *sigh* there is an idiotic 50 story limit... *grumbles* ... well whatever, enough of me rambling on, beautiful job! ~Leila* |
| Extraho-Uxor 2005-04-05 ch 1, | abusehey candy, this is very... I don't know how to describe it. It touches me. |
| Arutha 2005-04-05 ch 1, | abuseWow, impressive. I think this was a very good piece, and not to rag on you or anything (I really do love it ;P) but here's a little thing or two that I noticed: There's some questionable areas of grammer where I think you were trying for a certain style of writing, but I'm not sure if it came out quite like you wanted in every line. Example: "My writsts they bleed Like that of my heart" A direct translation: "My wrists bleed like the wrists of my heart" Unless you have wrists on your heart ;P Anyway, just a few nit-picky things like that, but overall a beautiful poem! "My dreams of eternity" I love that line; so poetic. Haha, keep it up grlfriend ;D |
| Moon-Chaser 2005-04-05 ch 1, | abuseWonderfully written, I could see the images in my head. This has a beautiful flow to it. I love this poem, I can understand the feeling in this poem also. Keep it up. |
| Sorrowful Dreams 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abusethis is very sad, and powerful. I love the way you use the words so descriptively. It's really touching. great job! ~Sorrow~ |
| Lost Soldier REVAMPED 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abuseNice imagery! This poem gets its point across quite well and is powerful. Creepy... |
| AlwaysAmberella 2005-04-04 ch 1, | abusethats is really well written, but it frightens me slightly. Lady Solitaire |