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| TheUberManlyMan 2005-04-27 ch 1,  | abuseI thought this was a wonderful piece. You did a great job with the description, and I could really feel like I was on the moon with the speaker. Also, I thought you did an admirable job incorporating your own thoughts and messages into the general narrative. It's usually a hard thing to do, but this flowed very naturally and, althought it probably wasn't the main point, convinced me that Earth is worth loving. Bravo. |
| melody mama 2005-04-15 ch 1, | abuseAnother great write. I love your diction as dorky as that sounds. But I have to say, I'm not entirely agreeing with this. In a way, it almost seems like you put to much trust in humanity, and honey, trust me, humanity will fail and fail again. Its the big guy upstairs who gains all of my trust and faith. The world he gave us is amazing and I thank him everyday, but I kind of like the idea of looking up, more than looking back down on Earth. And Earth is definitely not the only place to show or recieve love. Sorry Frost, but Heaven produces love like a zillion times better than you can even comprehend. |