an hourglass - something i dont't think i would have thought to write poetry about in a million years, and yet it was gorgeous, totally and completely gorgeous - I'll never look at one the same way again

oh, nice use of metaphors. Me like alot. -ADD

wow~~ very pretty imagery! I love the sense of timelessness~~

keep writing!

well I think it works well. Such a confusing concept to grip- but you put it out really well, and easy to grasp. great poem.

Hi Sumi-chan! I know you haven't heard from me for a while, but you know how schoolwork is -_- Anyway, your poetry, if possible, has gotten better than before, and the concept that you've written in this beautifully short piece is wondrous, and breathtaking. The formatting fits this piece wonderfully, and I wish I had poetical talent like yours. I have none to speak of >.< Anyways, wonderful job, as usual.

chibichocobo

It is what dreamers call reality and realists call delusion. An unbalanced equation where all definition fails.

itneresting

XD Brillant, Sumi-chan! KYahh~!! AMazing! O__O You are becoming such an amazing poet. *glomps/hugs* XD Keep it up, you are amazing!

!~* Noelle *~!

i really liked it...it made sense to me in some way, but i'm not sure what it meant to you. anyway, to me the chasm was death...basically you're talking about time and death...and you've lost somebody?? well i've lost somebody...this is only how i interpreted it. i'm interested in knowing what you were thinking when you wrote this. but this was really great, loved it. very deep, as you already said.